Jeff Names the Planets

An interesting, fun premise marred--ruined even--by amateurish writing. If you're not a fan of adverbs, you are going to be beyond annoyed by the author's infuriating and baffling overuse of the little buggers. Cliche abounds as well: 'made a beeline' should just not be used in the author's voice, ever. And that's not even the worst. Given some serious, hard-line editing, this could have been improved beyond all measure: any momentum generated by the strong idea killed too early by amateur-hour hackery. A shame.